Whoa! Look that ship just toppled over! Are they cars? My kayak rocks back and forth as cars make waves as they fall into the water. Wait is that a dog? It must have been on the ship! Let’s help it it of the water. “Hey doggy! Where’s your owner?” I say as I pull him up. He looks like a border collie. I’m going to take him to land. When we get their I get into my car, but the dog follows me. “Go find your owner,” I say, as the dog tries to leap into the car. ‘‘Oh fine then, lets go.”
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The post was good, it has a good structure As well as good details, I think you could add the speech marks for the first bit.