After supper, I was yanked out of my tent and brought to Lieutenant Roberts’ tent. As I stoodbefore him he told me that I stole the governors dog, deserted my post, and disobeyed orders.
Absolute rubbish. He also tells me he has no other choice but to flog me in the morning. He had to send
me back to my tent to sleep.
In the morning, Goodwin and I went to the tree in the bush where I was to get flogged. Goodwin
already started to build the triangle when Waruwi appeared. As I approach her, Goodwin tells me I
am already in trouble, but I ignore him.Waruwi opens the basket she was holding, and shows
me what’s inside. A puppy!
While the captain blabs on about what have done I sneakily put the puppy in my coat. Then I tell
Roberts that I did not steal the governor’s dog, and that I returned it to it’s rightful owner. Then
before he can blab more I present him the puppy. Goodwin tells him that it is a better hunting
dog and he finally agrees. Mission accomplished.
Great hob Rose, but the writing was sometimes hard to understand given that there were big spaces between the paragraphs. Although, i like your writing.
Darsh
I like the language you used nd i think there is not much to improve on
Maybe instead of blab use chat it just makes more sense good writing
Good punctuation and words, but you were missing some words in some sentences.